Reviewer: RokofAges75 Signed
Chapter 1: Chapter 1
I really love this story. You took a storyline that could be seen as a teenybopper fantasy and made it believable and realistic. You've done an amazing job with the characterization; I haven't experienced some of the things V and Nick have myself, but I feel like I can relate to them because you've made them so understandable and easy to empathize with. I love how you show their inner thoughts; it really helps because they - Veronica especially - don't always act on their feelings, so it's good to know how they really feel, and you do a great job at showing that. You also keep both sides balanced really well, alternating between Nick's and Veronica's perspectives. Also, I really like the way you're tackling some tough issues, like divorce, self-esteem, parents' opinions of us, etc. and doing a fantastic job with them, while still sticking to the budding romance plot. These issues add to the believability of the story and give it more depth; I'm usually pretty picky about romance cause I get bored with it when there's too much "romance" and not enough of anything else, so I really enjoy the real life sort of drama in this story. Keep up the AMAZING work; I can't wait to read more!!
Author's Response: Aww well thanks ROA! I really appreciate the comments! I've tried hard to make it realistic and believeable, but there's always room for improvement of course. I hope to get better as the story progresses cause there's still so much left to be said and done.
As for the issues, I just write about what I know, which is what a close friend of mine once told me. It's life expierences, and I can write it how I see it and I hope it shows in this.
Thanks again and I hope you'll continue to read! ;o)