Fic Talk > I Challenge You....
The Review Challenge!
julilly:
It wouldn't be wrong... bunch of assumers you all are lol
honey:
--- Quote from: mare on April 21, 2008, 07:31:28 PM ---Here is my review for Julilly's latest chapter of Hawk and a Handsaw which you should all go check out if you haven't already. It's a very creative anf original idea :)
Wow once again big kudos to you for updating. I have to say i'm a little on the confuzzled side with this chapter. It felt a little rushed and like Julie said, i'm not sure whether she is dead or alive or in some kind of pergatory state. Getting hit over the head with a bottle kind of did it for me. Can a ghost get hit over the head with a bottle? Unless the guy that did it was also a ghost, then that would suck. I'd hate to know that when I died someone could actually hurt me! That would suck monkey butts! I loved the backstory on Val's suicide. You has a great imagination miss Julilly which is why I's loves you soo much! And now I realize since i've left you a mini book this probably won't take. Was she hit with a bottle? No lol it was the butt of a gun wasn't it? I have the rentention of a goldfish. What? Did someone say something? Where am I?
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DOH!!! SPOILAGE!!!!! MUST STOP READING!!!!
kevmylove:
This is a cool thread, constructive criticism is always scary. But it's also very important and eye opening, I remember way back when i barely started posting my story "When I Found You" it was already finished. Then Mellz Bellz took the time to read it and let me know that the story was going too fast and that I should research the illness and symptoms. I did and rewrote most of it, it makes way more sense now. THANKS MELLZ BELLZ who probably doesn't even remember reading it. ;D
RokofAges75:
I finally got around to checking out Rose's new story "Born to Be," which drew me in from the summary. Here's the review I left for the first couple of chapters that are posted.
Interesting start! I like it so far... and I'm anxious to read more! I like your use of description and the way you word things, especially in the prologue. Just watch your tenses... you tend to switch tenses, even in mid-sentence, and it takes away from the flow of the writing. But going back to the descriptions, I like the two suns and the purple grass and the blue leaves and everything... how it all mimicks our world, but surreal and just "off."
Rose:
And I'm very happy to see you review it Julie, and took what you said and used it :) Cause I just re-edited my chapters and hopefully caught all the tense issues :) till I find me a good beta.
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