Reviewer: sarahmarie0727 Signed
Date: 11/20/07
Title: Chapter 3: Chapter 2 - Jumping the Gun
Ah, I loved it! I really like how you're starting back with some history. I know you mentioned it's not incredibly interesting, but at the same time, it's information we really need to know - so, job well done on making the "boring stuff" entertaining! lol.
I have respect for Sean, I just don't think him and Alyssa are meant to be together. I don't even know why. He just doesn't seem her type. Maybe that's because Nick and Sean are like, complete opposites - at least, that's the way I'm seeing it right now.
I'm not sure how I feel about Shayla. You're doing a great job at making these characters likeable. It would be hard for me to do that, considering I'd want Alyssa and Nick together. So, I commend you on that, as well.
Overall [sorry this was so long, lol] I think you're doing an amazing job. I don't "latch" on to stories easily, but I'm really hooked on this one. Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response:
Thanks Sarah! Backstory really sucks as a writer especially when you have SOOO many good ideas planned, but it REALLY is necesary for the action to have meaning, so I'm glad that you appreciate it. Thankfully enough we move on to some action next chapter!
Sean and Nick are opposites which I think makes it so interesting. I am trying to write both him and Shayla has unbiased as possibe especially at this point of the story. There's no reason not to like either of them (so far at least) outside of the fact that they're keeping Alyssa and Nick apart.