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[cabybakes]

Casual Thoughts - Chapter Four

Question...So Quinn's writing in the story, these are columns and not blogs? One thing about them, is that they read to me like like a livejournal blog. I'm not sure if that's what you intended, but that's how they come across. I could also be looking at it the wrong way, not sure.

They're really good for getting her voice into the story. Since this is 3rd person and all, I do like how it finds a way get her telling of the story in.

No, they aren't livejounal blogs...they post on a website but also run as columns in the LA Times.  Maybe i didn't do a good enough job conveying that.  I have been meaning to reply to your comments but I really never login on a real computer usually my phone.  The columns are very important, they are where you see the real Quinn.

I'm really ready for you to get further in, everytime I go back and read the beginning I cringe and I wrote it.  I cam only imagine how much it sucks for someone who isn't into this genre.  Thank you for the fair feedback, I appreciate it!

[RokofAges75]

Julie,your questions really made me think. I think in different parts of the story I related to Josie and in other parts Brian. I think this is why I tend to write what both were thinking. I tend to feel for both characters at times. Both have valid points and at other times they make me furious. In the end, I think I related more to Josie.

I had fun writing Brian because I got to show him as less than perfect. That presented me with a challenge, especially writing about Brian for the first time.

That's how I feel as a reader too; I can see both sides of it, and yet they both infuriate me sometimes LOL.  I'm liking them more after this last set of chapters, now that they've started communicating with each other better.

This is new for me, reading a story where Brian is not written as the boy-next-door nice guy.  He's a womanizer!  LOL  I bet that was a challenge for you, but it does make the story more interesting and gives me some more sympathy for Josie, seeing that a lot of the drama is his fault.

[Rose]

No, they aren't livejounal blogs...they post on a website but also run as columns in the LA Times.  Maybe i didn't do a good enough job conveying that.  I have been meaning to reply to your comments but I really never login on a real computer usually my phone.  The columns are very important, they are where you see the real Quinn.

I'm really ready for you to get further in, everytime I go back and read the beginning I cringe and I wrote it.  I cam only imagine how much it sucks for someone who isn't into this genre.  Thank you for the fair feedback, I appreciate it!

Okay, I think it's the Mood and Music on there, it immediately made me think of LJ lol. Not so much the blog itself. I do agree the columns showcase the character's voice a bit. I'm a big character person, so I love that lol.

I'm sorry I'm not that far into the story yet, between work, writing, etc. I haven't had as much time as I'd liked. On my days off, I'm positive I'll get further along quicker.

[cabybakes]

Okay, I think it's the Mood and Music on there, it immediately made me think of LJ lol. Not so much the blog itself. I do agree the columns showcase the character's voice a bit. I'm a big character person, so I love that lol.

I'm sorry I'm not that far into the story yet, between work, writing, etc. I haven't had as much time as I'd liked. On my days off, I'm positive I'll get further along quicker.

I'm honestly not sure why I put the mood, etc on there.  I think initially I did it to help separate the columns from the rest of the story, then I liked to have a song to hit where Quinn was at...tried to do the same with the chapter titles, I started doing that to maybe hint at what was under the surface.  I started this story a long time ago and it took 2+ years to write so I have asked myself why I did a lot if things I did in the beginning.  I made a promise to myself not to go back...ha!

You got stuck with a long story...I think you are doing pretty darn good on your reading!!!

[Rose]

I'm honestly not sure why I put the mood, etc on there.  I think initially I did it to help separate the columns from the rest of the story, then I liked to have a song to hit where Quinn was at...tried to do the same with the chapter titles, I started doing that to maybe hint at what was under the surface.  I started this story a long time ago and it took 2+ years to write so I have asked myself why I did a lot if things I did in the beginning.  I made a promise to myself not to go back...ha!

You got stuck with a long story...I think you are doing pretty darn good on your reading!!!

I'm guilty of using songs to hit where a character is at lol. I've gotten better about it, but I get that. You know, I just read Chapter 5, when did you write that chapter? I found it hit pretty well where Nick's at now. Only now he likes the gym more LOL.

[cabybakes]

I'm guilty of using songs to hit where a character is at lol. I've gotten better about it, but I get that. You know, I just read Chapter 5, when did you write that chapter? I found it hit pretty well where Nick's at now. Only now he likes the gym more LOL.

I started this story in 2008, I think?  Lol...this Nick is Julilly's post pothead Nick...ha!

[Rose]

I started this story in 2008, I think?  Lol...this Nick is Julilly's post pothead Nick...ha!

LMAO.

You nailed him pretty well, especially seeng how he is now, 3 years later.

[julilly]

I started this story in 2008, I think?  Lol...this Nick is Julilly's post pothead Nick...ha!

Post pothead Nick, I like it lol

[cabybakes]

LMAO.

You nailed him pretty well, especially seeng how he is now, 3 years later.

Thanks!!! 

[Purpura Lipstick]

I'm reading Room 438. I've read the first 6 chapters. The first few chapters moved slow for me, but chapters five and six moved faster and it's setting the main part of the storyline.

Kevin and Danielle's relationship seems a little strained when they are together. More on her part then Kevin's.

I like that their are two people stalking definitely makes it more exciting, especially since one is close to Danielle. I didn't see that comimg.

I'm looking forward to reading more.

This is one of the first stories I wrote where the girl and a guy had a relationship before the story started.  I will admit I am awkward with writing relationships between guys and girls in general.  It is definitely something I'm trying to improve. Thanks for the comments. 

[colorguard_diva]

Julie, for some reason I seem to give Brian flaws. He is the sweet guy, but does things that aren't so boy- next door. Even in the current story I'm writing he's flawed, even more so, but not as in your face.

[Carter-Orange]

I've made a start on You Give Love A Bad Name and so far, I'm enjoying it.  Nick and Tracy have just got married, but I sense that trouble is ahead and I can't wait to see what that is

It's well written and to the point, which makes it easy for the reader to follow.

[FrickingKaos]

Thank you Steph!!! I put myself in the story but you will see what happens to me lol. I am not the main character. Glad you like it!

[Carter-Orange]

I'm on Chapter 18 now.  It could do with being a bit more descriptive in places, but it's a nice quick and easy read.  I think Amanda should've had someone cover for her at the club so that she could take some maternity leave.  In reality, there is no way you'd go straight back to work after giving birth.  But in fiction I suppose anything is possible!

[FrickingKaos]

I can see what you mean, Steph. Amanda is the owner/boss so I didn't feel it was needed to mention maternity leave, but thanks for pointing it out! Mind you I did write this two or three years ago! Thanks for the feedback, it helps a lot!